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Cake Fight: Conclusion
it was entertaining, but since i didn't believe it possible...
By: TexWisGirl on November 17, 2013
Change the sale price to $5 and use it.
By: cranky on November 17, 2013
Nope. Even though it is very cute and you write well, fiction should not be in a memoir. I hate to say it, but this story didn't ring true in more than one area, you know? Things like--even if you used toothpicks to help keep the layers centered while you frosted the sides, you don't leave them in the cake. Sliding the top off the cake onto the floor--okay, I'll give you that one--but the bottom, too? Can't picture Grandma deliberately ruining your radio--and her bread. The radio just wouldn't work after being in the batter and the oven--let alone turn itself on. You have quite the imagination, though! ;)
By: soulcomfort on November 17, 2013
well I disagree with the folks above me- I howled with laughter at this story- and I would keep it just the way it is- you could always add a disclaimer footnote saying some of this might be "not so true" Now I must go laugh some more...thanks for all your stories!
By: Kathe W on November 17, 2013
It's a fun, enjoyable story but very clearly fiction despite the now, familiar characters. It's not only the radio getting into the mix but the whole outcome of the story. I see a memoir as truth with some mild exaggeration for humour's sake or to make a point, but I'd have trouble looking past this McGuffin.
By: Hilary on November 17, 2013
Maybe you could have a last chapter in the book called "Other Stories I Have Told" with a subhead like "The tales I've told in my memoir are totally true, I swear, but here are a few others that are mostly true, or partly true, or that I wish were true ..."
By: tom sightings on November 17, 2013
Picky bunch of critiques. I like Tom's suggestion, or keep it for another book that contain some truth. Either way, I enjoyed the story.
By: Daniel LaFrance on November 17, 2013
Include it. It's wonderful. But write a disclosure for the beginning of the book stating that some of your memories come from you imagination. Love, Janie
By: Janie Junebug on November 17, 2013
Hah - I'd never believe that you'd throw away cake... :-) You could include the story as a dream you had after your grandmother threatened to dump your radio into the batter. The story and the humor describe you so well that I would not mind it being included as a dream.
By: Pixel Peeper on November 17, 2013
I loved it! I say include it~
By: Shelly on November 17, 2013
Yes. It's too enjoyable and believable to omit it, Stephen. "Creative non-fiction" is the way to go. Don't feel that you have to be accurate with every detail. Writing is about creating good stories. And this one is excellent! No disclosures, apologies or disclaimers are necessary. Really, who would sue you over it? It's worth the telling. xoRobyn
By: Robyn Engel on November 17, 2013
Can you tell us how much the Easter bread actually sold for? So much of the ending relies on that radio being in the bread! I'm inclined to recommend keeping "like with like" in a book, or, as someone suggested, have a separate section at the end of the book for "slightly taller" tales :)
By: jenny_o on November 17, 2013
Ah, what the heck? It's a great story; throw it in the mix with a disclaimer if you feel guilty!
By: Eva Gallant on November 17, 2013
I tend to think that fiction is fiction and once major items are changed it cannot be called a memoir. I did have fun reading it anyway.
By: Tabor on November 17, 2013
I'd leave it out of the memoir, and submit it elsewhere, so it can be appreciated. Not that it wouldn't be appreciated in your memoir, of course. But folks might start to doubt your true stories.
By: Val on November 17, 2013
Change it to your grandmother wanted to teach you a lesson, so she hollowed out a baked loaf and hid your radio, expecting you to find it when you cut into it. Use it as fiction, or let people know that your book is mostly true.
By: mimi on November 17, 2013
I love your ability to spin a great story. I wouldn't include it in a book described as a memoir but it is a great story.
By: Cheryl P. on November 17, 2013
Yes. this fiction fits right in with the truth.
By: red on November 17, 2013
It makes a great tale!
By: John on November 17, 2013
Don't include it in your memoirs, BUT PRINT IT SOMEWHERE!!
By: fishducky on November 18, 2013
Oh, you have to include it. As I've said before, I've injected some fictional elements into my stories. Which I prefer to call "based" upon my life.
By: Al Penwasser on November 18, 2013
Absolutely include it. Great story!
By: Bouncin Barb on November 18, 2013
Heck yeah, you tell a wonderful story and this one is a doozy.....include it.
By: Oma Linda on November 18, 2013
I figured someone would buy the bread and find the partially melted radio in there. The fact it survived the oven was pretty farfetched. The fact it magically turned itself on? Uh...no. I'd keep this one out of your memoir.
By: Lexa Cain on November 18, 2013
Terrific story! Go ahead and use the story in its entirety - I always think the author is allowed a degree of latitude?
By: Bryan Jones on November 21, 2013
Yes, incorporate! ;)
By: Michael Manning on November 21, 2013
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